Deserted by muse
I am so dissatisfied
With today's haikus
Computer crashing
Leaves me with no paint shop pro
Sorrow rules the day
I am so dissatisfied
With today's haikus
Computer crashing
Leaves me with no paint shop pro
Sorrow rules the day
I shuffle along alone
Wishing she’d return
God and values deserted
For gas, greed, power
I feel deserted by hope
But gratitude wins
Hearts deserted by kindness
Dumped you like garbage
Lonely giants raise their arms
To a blazing sky
The desert is stark
But when the cactus blossoms
There’s nothing like it
21 comments:
..In the teeter totter of hope and despair 'But when the cactus blossoms'
is the key line for me.The other haikus are also appealing.Thank U for sharing these..
These grip the reality of our world, both public and private. The feeling is honest, the movement, real. Thank you.
Writing in Faith: Poems
Raven, I found that each haiku that I read, I wanted to say "THIS is what I am!," and then I read the next and no! It's that one. You manage to say so much in so few perfectly chosen words. Thank you for these.
I really enjoyed how you explored "deserted" and then spun it around on the last two haiku. Nice work.
I was swept by your emotions, then I read about the skinny gray kitty and was swept by my own. I have 2 gray kitties.
I agree, this prompt was hard! You gave us wonderful, raw emotion in your Haiku, Raven!
I like 'em. Especially the desert ones.
I like the Ravaged earth poem best.
(I tend to be very political)
Great work on all of them though!
platitudes knitted
into a mock haiku weave
five by seven by five
even in the desert
a cactus blooms
undeserted
love
mandy
Once I knew a man
Then I didn't
Go figure
Katherine, my five things meme is posted today at Mr. Richard's Bloggerhood.
Rich
I so love all your haiku. So many variations and nuances.
pinpricks
These are great, and I can relate to several of them. Doesn't sound like you are having a bad haiku day to me.
I could just feel those words.
Each of these speaks a truth of beauty or of beauty ravaged -- emphasizing for me that the internal, seemingly solo struggles of the individual are often mirrored in the external world, as are the beauties.
"but gratitude wins"
that made me feel better
love yr kuz... speak so clearly... love them all... but the kitty, and the dez for me they sing...
i love the scatterings of hope that peak through your desert kus!
Youth deserted me
I shuffle along alone
Wishing she’d return
My goodness, all too sadly I really get this one. But age has it's perks. (E.g., in old -- :-D -- poem of mine I mention that we don't have to repeat the same old mistakes anymore.)
Amazing how you have run the gamut of emotions and meanings. I especially enjoyed ...Youth deserted me . . .
so much happening
within and shared honestly
this prompt struck a chord
These ‘resonate’ mightily! Simply amazing haiku this week! Mine’s at Sacred Ruminations today.
Hugs and blessings,
Sorry that your computer means have deserted you.
Good series though.
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